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Article 1

Phrase: "The warm summer evenings beautiful, but it can seriously disturb your sleep"

Problem: Need ('s) for singular evening. If plural need (are)

Suggestion:

  1. "The warm summer evening's beautiful, ..."
  2. "The warm summer evenings are beautiful, but they ..."

Phrase: "Warm summer nights, good night's rest"

Problem: Nothing wrong grammatically

Suggestion:

  1. "A good night's rest on warm summer nights"

Phrase: "You will blow the coolness into the bedroom"

Problem: Nothing wrong grammatically, but coolness not properly a noun?

Suggestion:

  1. "You will blow the cooled air around the bedroom"

Phrase: "bet you'll cool down?! "

Problem: Punctuation at the end makes it a question/challenge. If its a tip it shouldn't ask questions I would think?

Suggestion:

  1. "This ought to cool you down!"

Phrase: "software version and possible updates!"

Problem: Add comma since part of a separated list before it

Suggestion:

  1. "software version, and possible updates!"

Phrase: "Sarah and Ella made their pyjamas for their Sleep Robots"

Problem: First "their" implies they used their own personal pyjamas to make them. Remove if not intended

Suggestion:

  1. "Sarah and Ella made pyjamas for their Sleep Robots"

Phrase: "Nice to see that the community is so creative"

Problem: Nothing wrong, just abrupt

Suggestion:

  1. "It's nice to see that the community is so creative"

Article 2

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